First cut of Take Out

I'm not posting it, I've just been working on it. I haven't got the rhythm at all right yet. It feels rushed and a bit jerky to me. It's only coming in around 4 minutes at the moment and I had been expecting 5. It might get a bit longer, but probably more like 4.5. Which is fine. Shorter is usually better. You don't want anything in your story that doesn't need to be there. It just feels a little odd to me because I'm used to things coming in long and needing to get trimmed down. I can't tell at the moment if it's a sign that my writing and shooting is getting better - tighter and more focused. Or if I'm just rushing and not shooting enough coverage.